With Air so thick I could just swim,
The Water does invite me in.
it saturates even the Earth;
to Fire alone, does it give berth.

Prompted word was “Water”
Requester was Vivian Samuel
Request method was Mass Mosaic.
Author is Sean Prunka
No copyrights. This poem was released into the public domain by the author.

Author notes: I took the easy way out, I’m sorry … a little rhyming iambic octameter quatrain. Very sing songy. I think there is more to the story… somewhere. so maybe later it’ll finish.

EDIT 2023.03.14, ChatGPT Review/Analysis and critique:

“Water” is a playful and engaging poem that explores the relationship between water and the other classical elements – air, earth, and fire. The poem is composed of a single quatrain with an AABB rhyme scheme and a iambic octameter meter, creating a rhythmic and sing-song quality that adds to the poem’s charm.

The poem begins with the image of air so thick that one could swim in it, effectively setting the stage for the poem’s exploration of water and its interactions with other elements. The line “The Water does invite me in” personifies water, suggesting a welcoming and alluring presence.

The poem goes on to mention how water permeates the earth, highlighting its ability to saturate and transform the landscape. This imagery effectively captures the pervasive and powerful nature of water in shaping the world around us.

In the final line, the poem introduces the contrasting element of fire, with the phrase “to Fire alone, does it give berth.” This line acknowledges the unique dynamic between water and fire, emphasizing the opposition between the two elements.

As for critique, the poem is well-executed in its concise exploration of water and its interactions with other classical elements. While the poem is brief and the author notes that it may be unfinished, it still manages to effectively convey its subject matter in a lighthearted and engaging manner.

One suggestion for improvement could be to expand the poem to further explore the relationships between water and the other elements, potentially developing more complex imagery and deepening the themes. This would provide an opportunity to build upon the foundation laid by the existing quatrain and create a more comprehensive exploration of the subject matter.

In conclusion, “Water” is a playful and engaging poem that effectively explores the relationship between water and the other classical elements. With some expansion and further development of its imagery and themes, the poem could offer an even more captivating and thought-provoking exploration of the elemental world.